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A beautiful girl cries in the night
She's sick and tired of hearing her parents fight
They hit her and tell her it's all her fault
She wipes away her tears and tastes the familiar salt
She packs her things and sends a text
The text says "help me, I can't take it" so the boy knows whats next
He takes her to his house, where she sits and cries
He hugs her tight and she says "I wish I could die"
She starts to shake, so he holds her tight
He kisses her forehead and tells her it'll be alright
She tells him what happened, and he wipes away her tears
He soothes her and tells her there's nothing to fear
"We'll find a place where you're safe and sound
We'll move somewhere nice, away from this town"
The girl smiles and falls asleep
Safe in his arms, she no longer weeps
He whispers to her "I love you so much"
She snuggles up to him and their feet gently touch
The boy can finally sleep peacefully
Knowing his girl is safe and can live worry-free.
this IS NOT ABOUT ME!

Just something I thought of in Math class. PLEASE pay attention to the 'he' and 'she' or else you'll be confused. Yeah, not my best, but hey, it's something, right?
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apachiart Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2013  Student General Artist
lovly
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Student Writer
I know I favorited this before, but I just have to say how much I love this.
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:iconemilyisinvisible:
EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Student Writer
Awe, really? Thank you! ♥
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Student Writer
No problem dear! You deserve it.
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:iconemilyisinvisible:
EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Student Writer
thanks c:
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2012  Student Writer
No problem!
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:iconj-ricaud:
j-ricaud Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
great piece really like it :)
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:iconemilyisinvisible:
EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Student Writer
thank you! c:
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aniqe Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
this is amazing
it's sad but really good written
and the story it's awesome, with all that i wouldn't wish for anyone to go though that stuff...
really great work
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:iconemilyisinvisible:
EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Student Writer
thank you c: yeah, I couldn't imagine having to go through this. thanks again!
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Julievein Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
:OOO Very good wrotten. It shows, that we always can have someone, who will be our spiritual support and this is beautiful :aww:
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:iconemilyisinvisible:
EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you c:
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:iconheavenscall:
heavenscall Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Wonderfull :)
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:iconemilyisinvisible:
EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Student Writer
thanks! c:
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:iconsunnydayee:
SunnyDayee Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Awwwwwww
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:iconemilyisinvisible:
EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Student Writer
c: thank you!
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:iconiseeitlater:
iseeitlater Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012
good job!
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:iconemilyisinvisible:
EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Student Writer
thanks! c:
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FallingAsleepTonight Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012   Writer
Hahaha, I used to write poems in class a lot too, good work :)
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:iconemilyisinvisible:
EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Student Writer
thanks! c:
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Naruneyl Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is so beautiful.
"Just something I thought of in Math class". Bored as well, yes? These damn classes, i tell you... XD
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EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2012  Student Writer
ahaha yes that geometry class... gah... thank you! c:
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FiyeroTigelaar Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful
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:iconemilyisinvisible:
EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Student Writer
thanks! c:
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FiyeroTigelaar Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you are welcome
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LaynNox Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2012  Professional General Artist
Great poem.
The constant she/he thing get me a litle tired at the end. but is a lovely work anyway.
Great job :D
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:iconemilyisinvisible:
EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2012  Student Writer
Oops, sorry... anyway, thank you! c:
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Student Writer
I know this feeling all to well. Great job.
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:iconemilyisinvisible:
EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Student Writer
Aw, I'm sorry :c but anyways, thank you! c:
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Student Writer
No problem your poem is amazing.
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:iconemilyisinvisible:
EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012  Student Writer
aww, thanks! c:
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:iconmisssheppard:
MissSheppard Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aw. Cute story. Good job. :)
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:iconemilyisinvisible:
EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks! c:
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HeonGaiden Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hmm..very cute story I say, =D

and some sorrow parts too...
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:iconemilyisinvisible:
EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! c:
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:iconariankaida:
ArianKaida Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
That's one of the cutest things I've ever read :3

Well done!
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:iconemilyisinvisible:
EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Student Writer
Thank You! c:
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:iconamonsternamednyan:
AMonsterNamedNyan Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012  Student General Artist
better than what i can do:

roses are red,
violets are blue,
i hate rhyming,
.......zebra.
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EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks! Haha that's fine! Everyone has their own talent. c:
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MeishkaBokeh Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
This is very sad and nicely written at the same moment. Good work!
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:iconemilyisinvisible:
EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! c:
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:iconjenduffy:
JenDuffy Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Hobbyist
Cute :)
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EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Student Writer
thanks c:
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DirtyHonesty Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
That's really pretty.
Though if you don't mind a critique, I think it would sound much better if you changed the last two lines.
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:iconemilyisinvisible:
EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks! And do you mean switching the lines around? I do appreciate critiques (:
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:icondirtyhonesty:
DirtyHonesty Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
Not switching them around, just rewording them slightly. For me those two lines feel a little bit 'off' compared to the rest of the poem.
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:iconemilyisinvisible:
EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Student Writer
oh, I see. I'll have to do that, thanks for the advice!
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Wise-lies Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is really beautiful! i love the rhyming and the story. :clap:
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:iconemilyisinvisible:
EmilyisInvisible Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! (:
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SternSchwarz Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2012  Student Digital Artist
great poetry :3
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